We all know the one-act play: ‘Trifles’ By Susan Glaspell. We all understand the main moving forces in that the story, and the main characters that cause the problems or come up with the solutions. We know that Mrs. Wright killed her husband because she had dealt with abuse and neglect for years, and was pushed past the point of breaking, we know she was being subjected to pretty much slavery, and we know the women empathize with her, see, we know everything. Or do we? I don’t reccomend you to use a question in your introduction.
What if there were other moving forces in this story, that weren’t I suggest you to change your contractions. given the credit they deserve, or just brushed off as little details that were ignored by some teenager just reading the story to get a grade in their english class. What if there was another story? An untold story, a story told by symbols. In this paragraph you repeated the word “we”, you could use synonyms to replace it. Also, where’s your thesis? (You don’t have a clear topic senetece. The topic sentence should identify the main idea and point of the paragraph. Mrs. Wright had Remeber to add present tense verbs! her own space in the house, where she could do what she wanted, at least for a little while. You should subsitute the use of Mrs. Wright’s name to something else. Mrs. Wright’s kitchen Kitchen is a place that she expected to cook, clean, and be left alone. It is evidently the most female feeling and looking space in the house, but this has a dominant male presence. She was her husband’s wife , before he was killed, or the men investigating his death (Wright, 16).
Pay close attention to the kitchen, which is a representation of her life, she is unable to keep one room she enjoyed being in, inside her house, clean. This is clear when County Attorney (Don’t add the word “the when it’s not nessacary) says: “Here’s a nice mess” (Glaspell 3). This shows the miniscule amount of effort she put into her own piece of joy she had, because she felt obligated to make her husband happy all hours of the day. Even though she wasn’t happy, she never stops trying to make her and her husband happy; however, he was never satisfied. This ultimately led to her snapping and killing her husband.
The Wrights marriage was Use present tense verbs broken and cold. While they were walking through the kitchen, the men investigating the scene found some broken preserves jars. Mrs. Peters says “She worried about that when it turned so cold. She said the fire would go out and her jars would break” (Glaspell 3). She is not talking about just jars, Mrs. Peters is talking about how the fire in Mrs. Wright’s life went out. This is representative of her marriage and that the fire and love with her husband went away, or went out, and it broke, just like the jars did.
This shows try using synoynms for the word shows. that at one time they loved one another and had fire and passion for each other, but as time went on, the fire went out. Rey your best to stop repeating the words “the and “they” because it’s becoming repetitive. e jars, along with the kitchen have significant meaning, and represent important parts of Mrs. Wright’s life, so it is hard to grasp how dirty and messy the kitchen was, and that the jars were broken, because this means her life is messy and dirty, and her marriage is broken. Some of your sentences are run on sentences, so try to fix that.
I suggest you to use stronger transitional words and sentences for the topic sentence in your body paragraphs. They also found a bird cage, that had a broken door, like it had been busted open with force, therefore showing whoever opened it was angry. The cage itself is symbolic in multiple ways. The cage held the bird in much the same way as Mrs. Wright’s domestic position held her (Ngezem, 7). So the cage was like a prison to the bird, along with Mrs. Wright’s house and miserable marriage is a prison to her, she feels trapped and when her husband forced the cage open, he also emotionally forced a part of Mrs. Wright open, that had never been there before. It seems to me that this is another run on sentence.
In Trifles, Mrs Hale says “Looks as if someone must have been rough with it” (Glaspell 5). This is symbolic because she was no longer happy and no longer wanted to be there but could not leave, so it felt like a prison, which leads to her “breaking out” of that prison, by killing her husband, which is represented by the broken cage door. You should replace the word because with something else and try not to repeat the same word in a sentence.
Try to improve your concluding sentences. Mrs. Wright loved loves her bird, it was a: ‘last chance at happiness’ type love. The bird is probably the most important back story telling symbol. The canary represents Mrs. Wright herself before her husband’s enforcement of his will changed her (Ngezem, 7). In the story they talk about how Mrs Wright used to be like a bird in many ways: I suggest you to use better wording to lead your examples. “She—come to think of it, she was kind of like a bird herself-real sweet and pretty, but kind of timid and—fluttery.
How-she-did-change” (Glaspell 5). I suggest you not to use “this is” for every explanation of your examples. This is explains her motive because John Wright is strangles, just as he strangles his wife’s canary (the only thing that Minnie’s husband could not possess) which gives her happiness and joy, but he took that from her (Stobbs Wright 7) This isn’t a proper citaton. The bird gave her happiness, and her husband hates that. He wants his wife to be miserable, so he forces the cage open and strangles the bird, just as Mrs. Wright breaks out of her own “cage” and strangles her husband.
Remember to use your story as an example for EVERY body paragraph. I tried to change all the past tense verbs to present tense verbs, nut try to use present tense verbs. Women wanted to be happy and stand up to their abusive husbands, but they were afraid of what might happen. The male position on female space is reluctantly tolerates by the women, but the scenes in the kitchen shows the differences between the male and female point of view, which leads to conflict between male and female views of law and justice. Wright 16)
You keep on repeating the kitchen scene and this might make your paper more redundant. For example, if the character’s are thought of as members of a defense and judges in a court, the women would be the defense and the men would be judges, and any little piece of evidence that the defense brought up was inadmissible, for the simple fact was that they were women and they are used to worrying about trifles” Here’s another run on sentence, try to fix this to make your paper more understandable.
It is unfair that the men completely base clue finding and detective work on being men and assume that the women can not do anything right. This tells the time period of the story, which was in the early 1900’s when women didn’t have many rights or freedoms, and the women didn’t really start fighting back yet. The topic sentence and the concluding sentence in this body paragraph is pretty good. I suggest you to work on synonyms for certain words thatyou obseeve that you keep on repeating throughout the whole paper.
The power of symbols I would’nt reccement you to start off your conclusion like this becuase you’re stating the title of your paper in this sentence. has many positive things to put into a story, such as giving background or insight on a short story or a one act play that might need it, they can help us empathize with certain characters, can even show us the setting, or can add suspense to a story, or can even show how or why people were killed.
I suggest you not to keep on using commas in your sentences. Power is enforced as one of the main forces in the story because they take more effort to find and understand what they need to be picked apart for the story to unravel. They take time and patience to understand, or to even find. They are complicated, thats for sure, but if they are found, they tell a great story, a story like no other, an untold one.